Jenna's "Free Write 3/20/11 " (Classmate Response)

http://jennafaith92.blogspot.com/2011/03/free-write-32011_20.html

I'm writing about this entry mostly because I like it, and not so much because I have a bunch of advice or suggestions.  I'll still do my best to suggest some stuff.  So, while reading the first-person part, I thought that Hans was murdering a man (I forgot that we all did the story about Hans as a chicken plucker).  I thought he was choking the man to death, and I was really freaked out at the "man, I can't wait for dinner" part.  I though Hans and his wife were going to eat the guy he killed.  I didn't get that it was a chicken until the third-person when the chicken was being referred to as an "it."  I think the way the animal is referred to as "him" in the first-person part is cool, because if a longer short story were to be written about Hans, it could be written like the chicken is really a man.  Hans could be doing all of these gruesome things to the chicken, but at the end, it can be revealed in a hint that it's only a chicken.  It doesn't have to be a "Hans, the chicken plucker" story, it could be any subject; make it sound like something strange is happening, and later reveal that the strange thing was actually something really common.  I think that would be a cool idea.  Anyways, awesome job!